Attack Of The Cyborg!

We were just eating out at frankie and bernies and all we hear outside is a thud and we just stop and stare at each other as we were confused of what it was but eager to find out what it was.Moses was the first one to leave but deep down he knew he was scared but on the outside as usual trying to act brave.Nelson came after him and then cut through Moses  and Juan because they were too scared and took too long.Nelson then arrived at the edge but looked back at us.He looked back at where he was walking and down he went.The hole was deep and Nelson was stuck down there probably like jelly with a few broken bones.

He shouted,’Go,it’s not safe here!’.We all promised each other from day 1 that we would protect each other’s back as much as we can when its necessary.We lost 2 members as they ran away because of some loud screeching sound.’I will never leave you!Remember you have always been like a brother to me!Im not leaving without you!’,I shouted.

There were only three of us left to help Nelson.As the oldest I thought what was best.I jumped in the hole and went for Nelson.As I was about to grab him to pick him up and bring him a round rock(most probably an asteroid) lifted up.It took me so I slipped and couldn’t catch Nelson.I flew off to places I didn’t know.I tried using my robotic arm as I lost my human arm in a car crash when I was 4 to help me look for anything useful to bring me back to the place that I belong.I landed after a few minutes but then the thing I just realized was that I didn’t have a clue of where I was.The asteroid then exploded and green goo came out but a tiny alien came out with it.As I got closer it got bigger and bigger but then I realized it was big from the start I was just seeing it from a long distance.It opened its big square shaped eyes and with a robotic voice saying,’Target found.’

Before I knew it I almost got my head knocked out of my body.I was like a baseball and a bat because it was trying to kill me.At first I thought that at first it was an alien but it turns out to be that it’s a cyborg with half alien and half cyborg with it therefore having all the powers of the technology I have to use.All I could think about is living and how I couldn’t save Nelson in time before I got taken away by the asteroid and taken to this different world that I don’t even know about or even knew it existed.

Then I had the best idea possible and was here using my technology as I come from the future I used as much defense and protection as possible like if I was an unstoppable cyborg.I was ready I went face to face with the cyborg,I was shaking on the inside but couldn’t show it because I would easily be beaten and will hav put it more confident.I ran up its robotic arms thinking I can do this.Reached the top at the head and then looked for a way to destroy it.Nothing,Nothing at all to do to destroy it.I ran down to the stomach again and there it was clearly seen,the heart,the most sensitive part of its body.I went in cutting my way through to reach the heart cutting through metal parts,leftovers and I was standing right in front of it.I was thinking about the way to destroy it but then realized if it’s made of metal how could I destroy it with a metallic sword?I was there ready to destroy the robotic thing,then thought of destroying it with lava.

It was too late there was no lava close to get to destroy it and there was also no time at all so the only thing I could do was stab the heart.I was in on it,2 centimeters to killing the cyborg and a blade comes.I knew this was my end.

To be continued…

 

2 Comments

  1. Well done for following your feedback Leo and shifting this into the sci-fi genre.

    In order to achieve the Genre Writing badge however, you need to follow the feedback that has been given below and improve your story accordingly.

    1) Try not to use too many events in your story and avoid listing things that have happened. You need to describe only the key events to create an image for the reader.

    2) Focus all the time on creating an image for the reader. Don’t get distracted from that purpose.

    I look forward to see how this turns out.

  2. Leo

    February 8, 2016 at 6:22 pm

    In my opinion I think I will achieve the badge because I describe what the setting looks like and also describe how my characters are and a small description about them.Also,because I met the target of using figurative language and I know I have everything necessary for the genre writing badge so therefore I think I deserve it.

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